May 20, 2013

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Faiz Post : Monty Mouse

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Source : http://www.writingsinrhyme.com/index.php/the-silent-diner/


Hi I am Monty. I am 5 years old. I live in a hole at grandma's house. I feel so comfortable because she always gives me a cheese and that's why I like this place.

I feel scared because grandma had brought a new cat. And the cat is always going to chase me. And grandma will not take care of me anymore. She will take care of the cat. The cat look scary because  whenever he looked at me he purred. But grandma was just relaxing watching TV.

When I went out of my hole to get some cheese from the refrigerator. I saw the cat walking and looking at my hole, but then I went to the the refrigerator and close the door and hide with a cheese around me. 

After that, I went out of the refrigerator. I felt full just then the cat saw me and he chased me along the corridor and he put his hands on top of me. But he missed by 1 inches, I ran back into my hole.

I had a plan. My plan was  to make a trap for the cat. First, I need a wire, second I need a string, third I need a meat. When I finished making it I put it near the cat cage at night.

In the morning, grandma was out for shopping. I looked at the trap that I made, but the cat was still sleeping. So, I waited him until his awake. After he woke up he went into my trap and he got stuck. I was laughing the whole time but he was angry.

After that I felt sorry. So, I just opened the trap and let him go. Now I felt sorry too because he kept chasing me. And now we live in peace. 2 weeks after that, grandma always take care both of us.


Written by Faiz Firdaus (8 years)


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Teacher comment :
What a happy ending, your plan was very succesful!
Your use of past tense is improving, keep following on this.

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8 comments:

hana sugiharti said...

asikkkk udah mulai nulisss jempolll

Asep Haryono said...

wah saya juga ah. Jempol

Ellys Utami said...

Iya mak... udah mulai suka dia. Kadang malah tak terkendali, nulis panjang lebar hahaha...

Ellys Utami said...

Aiiiihhhh.. pak Asep, makasih jempolnya ya... hehe.. :)

Bunda Zahra poenya Cerita said...

Hebat ya Faiz..., memang untuk anak2 yang suka membaca kemampuan untuk merangkai kata akan jauh lebih bagus. Ini terbukti pada anak didik saya. Mayoritas yang hobby membaca akan lebih mudah mengerjakan tugas2 yang berhubungan dengan menulis.

Salam kenal dan salam hangat dari Depok :)

Ellys Utami said...

Salam bunda...
Di sekolah Faiz, anak2 memang dibiasakan membaca. Setiap hari wajib baca 1 buku, setiap buku yang sudah dibaca harus diceritakan ulang (bukan dihafalkan) di sekolah atau di rumah.

Buku yang dibaca awalnya adalah buku berhalaman tidak lebih dari 10 lembar dan lebih banyak gambar bertahap hingga sekarang buku yang dia baca sedikit lebih tebal.

Tugas menulis sering diberikan, dan guru selalu memberikan apresiasi walaupun kadang ada kalimat yang kurang tepat.

Alhamdulillah kemampuan dan kemauan menulis Faiz mengalami progress cukup signifikan. Kesimpulan saya, menulis lahir dari kebiasaan membaca.

Terima kasih sudah berkenan singgah bunda....

Lidya - Mama Cal-Vin said...

wajah si mpussnya lucu banget

Ellys Utami said...

Wajahnya melow banget gara2 gak bisa mau maem si monty hihihi...

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